One beautiful summers day, two girls and their dogs were on a cruise ship.The girls names were Emma and Brooke.Their names were twin sisters called buttons [Emma's dog] and bubbles [Brooke's dog].The four were on their their way to their room when something caught Brooke's eye "Ahh, Emma there's a big old ship over there" Brooke said "and it's coming our way!!!
Emma had long shiny blonde hair and blue eyes, she wore her hair down over her shoulders. Brooke has light brown hair and blue eyes, both girls were ten years old. their dogs had golden fur and sliver collars.
It was a.....PIRATE SHIP!!!!!! On the pirate ship the captain Elizabeth was shouting "ahoua yoo mateys theirs another ship!!"
Elizabeth had light brown hair hat is always down she had one brown eye and one green the pirate ship reached the cruise ship and kidnapped Emma, Brooke and the dogs!!!!
"AHH!" cried Brooke. They were on the pirate ship."WOOF,WOOF" barked the dogs "Arr,I will hang your dogs and it them"cried Elizabeth "oh, no you won't" cried Emma! Well the group was screaming and barking at each other the ship was sailing to a FREAKY ISLAND!!!
"we are here captain" yelled one of the crue members."where?" asked the girls but before the captain could answer the girls were chucked off the ship! They were walking through the forset when they met a girl called Olivia "hi"said Brooke "I got chucked off captain Elizabeth's ship I have been on this is land for 5 years" Olivia told them.One day the girls saw a paddle boat, it could fit 3 people and 2 animals in it. They climbed into the boat and found there way home!!!
"we are here captain" yelled one of the crue members."where?" asked the girls but before the captain could answer the girls were chucked off the ship! They were walking through the forset when they met a girl called Olivia "hi"said Brooke "I got chucked off captain Elizabeth's ship I have been on this is land for 5 years" Olivia told them.One day the girls saw a paddle boat, it could fit 3 people and 2 animals in it. They climbed into the boat and found there way home!!!
THE END!!!!
great effort
ReplyDeleteI think you did well on paragraphs
next time put more detail in the paragraphs
by sam
thanks Sam I will use your feedback
Deletei like how you did paragraphs Kara but next time you should do more foolstops olivia
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